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BlakkaBlakka
Its been a minute since I picked up a pen and wrote something...
Be as cruel as you want. Just so much as its productive in what I am asking.
Where am off here?? Hit me back

All this time I been holding on,
To what I’ve held strong,
And its never felt so wrong,
But this storm of emotions is finally calm,
I’ve come to terms this relationship won’t move on.
I haven’t wept since that sentence rolled out of your mouth and split us apart,
This is the end, forget where we started,
Here’s our obituary we’re dearly departed,
Even after countless efforts to patch things up and thwart it,
Now I’m face to face with the inevitable
Its too tough to swallow, cause this isn’t edible
But this is the truth these terms aren’t medical
These are my last words why choose them wisely,
Since there’s no love I want you to despise me,
Release the tension, your reaction shouldn’t be surprising,
After all these years, and your fallen tears,
the question remains, where do we go from here?
The only feasible answer is in opposite directions,
No looking back and certainly no exceptions,
I’m tired of you, tired of this and what we’ve become,
I’ve lost all feeling and gone completely numb,
It’s nice to know you can leave me, leave me hanging by a thread of hope,
I should have been used to this, still find it hard to cope,
I wish I could have known it would be so easy,
But from the bottom of my heart, thank you for releasing
YoungCee
I liked it but Im more into poetry and shit where you dont have to have metaphors and all that shit I dont understand. I aint in a position to give advice because Im shit but you should ask Streets, Blaze, Shizz, Gluv etc. They'll all give you honest opinions But I liked it.
BlakkaBlakka
cool thanks
jack frost
1. Try to make all your lines around the same length, that makes for a good flow, you don't want to have one or two lines stretch the page while the others aren't even close to that long.
2. Add multi's and wordplay, these give your rhymes more of a lasting effect than just using one word to rhyme, try using two or three rhyming words at the end of your line.

and that's about it, there aint much to it, just keep writin.
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