Where im from niggas dont die on they own/
they die from the chrome/
bullet wounds and abrasions. no surviving it holmes/
bodies discovered skin to the bone, death threats on the phone/
slumped from assaualt to the body, no respect shown/
bullets thrown, metal burns through a nigga cerebral/
rip his head open, skull cracked, blood seeps through/
im from where crack and heroin defeats you/
ho's wanna eat you, niggas with the gloc takin shots to terminate you/
police hate you, dirty cops wit corrupt plots/
drivebys on blocks, niggas get shanked or knocked/
violence dont stop, it continues like time continueum/
niggas get tortured and abused, like the dude from the pendulum/
the gangstas you see on t.v. is who ya kids progress to be/
scarface, al capone, crimes comprised wit high complexity/
street pharmicist, hustling rocks like a point guard passing in the lane/
expertise wit moving keys, fuck police, accumulate pocket change/

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bump man nice still

8/10

thanx for your feedback man. appreciate it.

def feelin that homie..8/10..kep it up

thanx for the feedback. i wasnt feeling this shit myself though, i figured it was too simple and didnt have enough punchlines, do yall think it whould be a good demo song???

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6.5/10.

It was aight, not bad, but like you said, a little too simple. Need to create more imagery, keep the flow up, a little more multi's maybe.
But overall it was aight, nothin special but nothin to call wack.

8 and a half