I...e.n.j-o and y..you low lifes..that's no lie (4x)

i jot w/distincted skillz..peep how my ink spillz
bet money on it..naw, you'll decrease in millz
like a bad epodemic, i can't be relieved from bein ill
fiyah is hott!! but so cool, hell..i could freeze it still
i'm betta like da healed that kneel, for da g.o.d. after killed
peep that line /\ it'll make say "it's passed a chill
or did it get ya diss appointed..i e.n.joy it
like a mustang fe's squeeze me joystick
pimpin..they say he employ tricks
but you'll neva eva see me in funny hats w/feathers
my t shirt cover da abs made from armani black leather
so yo retired attire, vs. fiyah's..aww that mani cat is better
when will they step they game up? it's hoop dreams.......prolly neva
it's the alpha & omega, non greater..you dumb hater
fiyah's arson is madness in march's end is danger
to think high on ya, give me a daydream n' chronic smoke
it's not april yet, but heck..i see ya fools as a lot of jokes
blogger's quote all i spoke..if he kill he, am i responsible?
we all got brains..it's optional, but i'll send a get well to da hospital
though it's fun how i get under they skin like an acupunturist
da discoverence, causes sufferin influences..son of a bitch

I think this started off ill, but you seem to have lost some momentum around the sixth bar or so.
Towards the latter part of the verse, it definitely picked up again and you finished off strong. This board seems completely dead since I left, so keep writing. Maybe this section will pick up again and with more emcees, you can only get better.

6/10

Hahaha!

i been gone awhile but it looks like im back. friggin work blocked me. good to still see you doin ya thing mani!

I was feelin this verse nigga, it was pretty tight. I'm new to the site so just checkin out what dudes be droppin on here. Stay up.

Thanks for peepin ya'll

workin overtime, goin to da gym, gettin drunk n blazed, goin back to college, visitin back in da bay, and girls of course..i have a hard time more and more to write..though i freestyle..i don't record shit smh...i know

well i'll try to spit a couple writin threads this weekend