DA STRUGGLE IS HARD...BUT WE CAN MAKE IT...
Feel my pain...true story...
THE TRUTH
hook:They tried 2 hold me back for so long(repeat,so long),
I felt weak,but now I'm strong(repeat,now I'm strong)
So i'm steady moven on(repeat,moven on)
.....

(1st verse)

For so many years they tried 2 hold me back,
did'nt wanna see me turn into a big success.
From promotin clubs 2 making big mac's,I was doin that.
Hungry for a record deal,lookin for agents.
Like where they at.
tryin 2 build mills though this search.
I had hard times...my people died,and homies killed.
I had no money,but plenty bills.
me and my family ate well,but still wanted big meals.
nice whips with big wheels.
people see me,and say"Ladynell how ya feel".
Inside felt like,an over dose of pills.
Ruff life,could'nt believe it was that real.
that's why now, I thank God for the past I lived...
(hook)
(2nd verse)

I move fast,but live day by day.
Tryin 2 get this cake.
2 live a better way,for me and my seeds
I gotta achieve,tried of starbin in these streets.
lookin at my black peeps,beggin for some green..
HOPING MARTIN LUTHER KING DREAM WILL SUCCEED.
tried of holdin up bags,wishin for cash drops.
young men leaven women stomachs pop.
Drug addicts leaven everything hot.
Young murders leaven da world in shock.
The war in Iraq,got the whole economics block.
Most of america on Bush jock.
don't even know they voted a devil,in da president spot.
That's why,That's why i'm so hot....
(hook)
(3rd verse)

I hold my head up day by day giving thanks,
2 da Lord for life he gave me.
but questionin myself on why it's so hard tryin 2 live it.
Still strugglin,but i'm so gifted.
God gave me talent,but they don't know what I can do with it.
Never put they feet in my shoes.
I'm quite sho they can't fit it.
Cause my lyrics from da heart,they seriuos.
When i'm upset I spit wicked.
At times i'm cool,my lyrics is fearless.
I just don't understand da world with this dumb shit.
Tryin 2 hold down,God strongest.
We fall down for a second,
but bounce back,and make it happen
that's why i'm on top and u haters not.
(hook)

just tryin 2 learn how 2 tell a real story..
need feedback......good and bad....thanks...

you have budding song-writing qualities...you have the format, and that fed me a lot in terms of understanding..there is always room for improvement but if you apply the right punctuations and beat, that there is enought o be hot

that shit was nice, though, keep it up!

Lostgyrl,u gave me feedback then u changed ya post...
what's up with that...

gyrl i came u yo props....
u write great poems...
but u did'nt give me feedback on this song...
that's a true story about me..
but God bless me 2 live better now..


so please every1 give feedback..

thanks....i still learnin how 2 write text...
thanks again....

I'm sorry.. i'm working.. bare with me

it was dope.. only thing.. in my head.. the ballet flows on the level of "slippin" by dmx.

thanks for da feedback...

Im feelin this one fa'sho sis....Im already singin tha hook in my head!!!!! lol....u on tha right track now gurl KEEP IT UP!!!!!!

thanks sis for da feedback...

yea mos def keep doin wut u doin

thanks for da feedback...
still learnin...once i finish on this site..
i'll be able 2 freestyle,and write well...
thanks again..just testing myself...
hard work do pays off...
just can't give up...

Honestly

This was wack to me

Most of that stuff didnt rhyme. If Dmans your brother, ask him to help you write lyrics.

thanks for da feedback..u must can't read well 2 b in college...
cause da words do ryhme...
but yo feedback will still help me get stronger....
but that was a true story...
thanks again....

yo i liked it it did have a steady flow shit i need to let shit off my chest

thanks for keepin it real...
cause i'm tryin so hard 2 improve....
i won't give up til i reach my goal on this site...
i will get better and be great....
thanks for da feedback....Byrd

every line do not have 2 ryhme...
it's what happen in my life that makes sence...
u r a dumb ass for not listen and tryin 2 b rude...
it's a true story..so da hell with yo negative thinkin...
i'm not respondin 2 u with this foolishness anymore..
1st u said u will help me.then turn around and try 2 diss me...
u r truely full of bs..2nite...

streets. what college do you go to. i'm in IONA in New Rochelle.

i will get better...but that's how u feel...this text...
i would love for u 2 see me in concert...
cause u would back up dem words...
i really hope u is fire and have a MAJOR RECORD DEAL!!!
cause u talk 2 much shit...
everybody deserve a chance..
and i'm far from lettin black women down u ass hole...
that's real....

i don't c y they let u in college with da way u disrespect women....
but everybody know i'm wack right now..but so what...
wack is gettin me paid people who always wanna be da best
never have nothing but words...
so come stronger...i got money in my pocket it's bout survivin dummie..
all u do is battle people on here...and disrespect ladies...
u ain't real at all..i don't care if ya flows r hot....ya attitude is not...
stop talkin bout others...and get yo life right 1st...
read MATTHEWS CH7 verse1-2
JUDGE NOT,THAT YOU BE NOT JUDGE
2)FOR WITH WHAT JUDGEMENT YOU JUDGE;YOU WILL BE JUDGE ;AND WITH THE
MEASURE YOU USE,IT WILL BE MEASURED BACK TO YOU....
SO I WILL REBUKE U RIGHT NOW IN JESUS NAMED..
I HOPE GOD BLESS EVERY1 WHO TREAT PEOPLE LIKE U...NOW ON DA REAL GOOD
NITE...MAY PEACE BE WITH U...AND I HPOE U SUCCEED IN YA DREAMS..
I'M GON.....THANKS FOR DA FEEDBACK GOOD..AND BAD....

i don't respond 2 walkin devils...
i just step on dem with my toes...
u need help...
talkin bout f...da bible...
now...u sound really stupid...
than my wack ass ryhmes....
na...that was'nt funny at all...
so i'm done with u...
i'll never buy ya cd's r my people
u da devil son....

Wow, she should stop replying after that!

And BTW, you fuckin' ignorant dumbass(ladynell), not following the religion of Christianity doesn't mean I'm the devils son. Only closed minded christians have that type of perception, OH WAIT, YOUR A CLOSE MINDED IGNORANT CHRISTIAN.

I respect the religion for the MOST part, but I dont respect posers like you, who act like they are all religious only to write songs like "boy gimme that dick".

touché...true and pre-marital sex is called Fornication which i'm sure you know AND we all live in a sinfull world..to even covet a girl or a car is a sin..but Calles its still no reason to blaspheme..but fa realz..no one on here a saint....i sure as hell aint..the biggest deed you could do vis-a-vis God is to admit it...it is written that he hates pretenders and shape-shifters

damn.......ladynell talk too much.........someone sed she's a prank multi....

@ Streets, I dont fuck with the Bible either. None of that shit Is believable especially being written by "MEN". Where the fuck they get there information from??? God??

"It's just stupid to me how christians feel that all NON CHRISTIANS should follow THEIR moral code. Thats why I said fuck the bible."

And the funny part Is not just some of them feel that way, all of them do! If your not living the way they do or not worshipping the "GOD" they are, your living In sin In "their" eyes. Fuck em'!

^^^
word, we're not all super judgmental delusional wierdos....(altho it seems like it with all these crooked tv stations and churches...)

i got nothing against people for their religion

i aint tryna judge no1 or nuthin..icant do that..my oppinion as valuable as whoevers..i would not try and distort someones view, yo i aint built like that...my moms dnt respect god, sumtime she talk as if she the most powerful woman around...i respect everyones views...true sum shit in the bible be a lil ehh...but i follow its teachings because they can shape you for good...i been to the crooked churches..and yo, they talk a lot of shit..(ie they be like "listen...i can feel the spirit of God..........{then they start shakin violently} HERE HE IS! and they start talking that secret prayer and then they go crazy} and i b like "tchyea right!" but...a lot of my closet friends are atheists or muslims, i even got sum voodoo lovin muhfuckas so ya kno..iss all good...peace..i aint tryna start no holy war in this bitch...but for sum "fuck the bible" is saying "fuck the word of God" thus "fuck God"...but yo, i aint sweatin man...we came here ta rap...im sure they got gospel sites elsewhere

EY...WHO PRANKED ME ON MY AOL????? I KNOW ITS SOMEONE HERE

Let me give a quick comment...


regardless of what people say about the bible..
It's teachings in my opinion is the way of life..
I haven't read anything in the bible that tells me
otherwise..


All books about religion were written by man.. (show me proof of anything saying otherwise)
It's up to you what you believe in..

Do I believe the devil exist.. sure.. good verses evil will be the thing until the end of time, and only when "you cross over" will you then see for yourself.. until then I know there is life after death.. why because the bible tells me so.

There are alot of things I've written that make me a believer.. Only God could have giving me this gift.

Bitch shut up ass upain't nobody give a fuck about God on a message board,get the fuck outta here.